Cold emails. So I just received a cold email today that I thought was a fairly accurate representation of cold emails I get frequently.
So just for fun, I decided to take on the challenge and spruce it up. Below, I pasted the original email and my modified version below it. If I ever get time, I will update this post to explain why I changed certain things. In the meantime, send me your opinion of the two version:
Original:
Hi James,
Have you come across a multi-channel marketing service to get you fresh and targeted prospects for new leads and appointments?
I’d like to show you how we can fill out your calendar with engagements through our voice, email, online and social media approach. We give our clients the highest possible sales target.
Are you available this week for a call to discuss this further? Kindly let me know the best number to contact you.
You can also set up an appointment here for a scheduled date and time.
Revised:
Hi James,
Have you seen a marketing service with just hot prospects?
We only give clients the highest quality, because we want them coming back. [Insert co name] fill sales pipelines like yours to the brim through voice, email, online and social media with [Insert social proof of association].
If I can prove these are serious leads, are you free this week for phone call? 10 minutes max.
Or just setup an appointment HERE